My House

山东省淄博市金山中学七（1）班  曹金玉

【写作要求】

人们常说，“家是个充满着幸福味道的、全世界最安全的地方。”对同学们来说，家又是一个宁静的港湾。请你以“My House”为题向你的老师和同学们介绍一下你的家吧！

【学生习作】

Do you want to know about my house? Come with me! This is our living room. It’s big and clean. There is a sofa in the middle of the room. There is a big television in front of the sofa. Sometimes my father watch (1) sports programs on the sofa. My sister and I often watch cartoons there.

Next to the living room, on the right, is the balcony. There is (2) many beautiful flowers on the balcony. This is my grandmother’s favorite place. She often waters and looks at the flowers here.

My bedroom is on the left of the living room. I also study here. There are (3) a computer and a bookshelf in my bedroom. I often play computer games there.

I like my house very much.

【习作点评】

1. watch应改为watches。该句时态为一般现在时，且主语my father为第三人称，故动词应用第三人称单数形式。

2. There is应改为There are。该句为there be句型，且主语many beautiful flowers为复数形式，故此处应为There are。

3. There are应改为There is。there be句型中的主语为多个名词并列的时候，动词be的形式应与最靠前的名词保持一致。

【教师点评】

作者对自己的住所进行了详细的描述，文章结构合理，文笔流畅，语言生动活泼。尽管出现了几处错误，但对文章整体结构把握较为合理，这方面也是值得我们借鉴学习的。

【亮点展示】

作者对there be句型能够学以致用。

（指导教师：路平）

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